Week 3 we started to explore 'Wow' words which are adjectives that help add description to our writing. When working on this writing we learnt how to use a thesaurus and this is now an important tool we use in our writing. We wrote a reflective recount on the Swimming Sports to include our 'Wow' words.
Week 4 we looked at how similes and metaphors can add imagery to our writing. We explored the use of these through song and looked for them in our journal stories.
Have a read of the examples below.
A Journey through the mind of Tom Edric Boyle.
Take a trip inside my mind, where you can learn about me.
At times I Like dancing and putting on jazzy music.
I have a family. I have a brother and a sister and a chihuahua and two cats and a dog.
I dream of Being a techie one day.
I wonder how computers are made.
My hope is being a techie in a few years time.
I can often be annoying but kind and helpfull. I am good at art.
When no one is watching I like to sing and dance.
This year I want to get better at MATHS!
A Journey through the mind of Jess
Take a trip inside my mind,you can go anywhere you want! Like Antarctica or maybe Space!.
At times at night I have dreams I can’t work out if they’re real or not.
In my family I have two sisters called Georgia and Emma, a brother called Thomas, Mum [Rachel], Dad [Dave], a dog called Gus and a cat called Mya.
Sometimes I dream of going to the moon with my friends and meeting aliens.
I wonder if I get to travel the world when I’m older and fly over the pacific ocean.
I can often be found doing gymnastics and playing soccer. I also really enjoy jumping on the tramp.
When no one is watching I will hide under my bed and read for hours and hours.
This year I what to get better at spelling.
I could feel wavy water splish, splashing around me, as I raced through the icy water. I felt nervous as well as a massive rush of excitement scream through my veins, it felt like the weight of the world was on my shoulders.
I could hear the enormous crowd encouraging their kids Go! Kick! Swim! C’mon! A little further. I heard Mr Kinsey calling out the champions on the podium.
The warm sun was glistening off the water. As I was standing on the border of the swimming pool my eyes were fixed on the black T in my lane.
I feel awakened like someone has woken me from a deep sleep.
I feel shaky as the horn goes and I dive into the water.
I hear yelling as I start swimming, I think it’s my Mum.
Suddenly I feel frozen , the water is as cold as an iceberg.
I also am heroic as I finish my swim and I find out where I came.
I see the finish line getting closer and closer to me every time I take a breath.
I see that Kate is winning I try hard to pass her, but it is too late she has already won. I come second.
I hear people screaming at the top of their voices, it sounds louder than a helicopter landing.